This week has been very busy for me. This week Ms. Payseur provided us with a new method in editing our partners blogs. She gave a paper that said "6 Trait Informative Peer Editing Tasks". We had six steps to follow which are stated below.
- IDEAS: (Blue)
2) Put a large (*) star next to any ideas or concepts that do not make sense, are hard to understand, or are not clear.
3) Type “PAPER PURPOSE:” at the top of the paper and “to inform.” Tell the author if his/her paper has a different/wrong purpose.
4) Add 3 possible ideas to make the story more interesting.
AUTHOR: Revise your paper so that you:
1) keep and add unusual/interesting ideas/details
2) rewrite unclear/ not understandable ideas/concepts
3) make sure your purpose fits the assigned purpose.
4) Consider the ideas offered by the peer editors. Add 3 new ideas/details.
- ORGANIZATION: (Orange)
Label them with those words. State whether there is enough information in each paragraph.
2) Draw a box using [brackets] around all words that show time, order, or transition (first, next, finally, etc.)
AUTHOR: Revise your paper so that you:
1) Add/expand paragraphs.
2) Change/add words that show time, order, smooth transition.
- VOICE: (Purple)
2) Draw a box using [brackets] around all sentences that use sensory images of touch, taste, smell, hear, or see.
3) Highlight any lines that ask questions of the reader.
4) Identify all comments, opinions, or sentences that speak directly to the reader.
AUTHOR: Revise your paper so that you:
1) keep/add 5 words that show emotion
2) Keep all sensory images of touch, taste, smell, hear, or see/add 5 more.
3) keep/add 3 questions and sentences that speak directly to the reader.
4) Keep all/add 3 comments and opinions.
- WORD CHOICE: (Pink)
2) Underline all weak verbs.
3) [Bracket] all colorful adjectives.
4) Underline all boring adjectives.
5) {Box} all adverbs.
AUTHOR: Revise your paper so that you:
1) Add 5-10 more powerful verbs
2) Change all the weak verbs to more powerful ones
3) Add 5-10 more colorful adjectives
4) Change all the boring adjectives to more colorful ones
5) Correctly change/add 5-10 adverbs with “-ly”.
- SENTENCE FLUENCY: (Yellow)
2) Underline all the simple sentences, and write “S” at the beginning in (parentheses).
3) Circle all the compound and complex sentences and write “CD” or “CX” in (parentheses).
4) Count the total number of each and write that on the last page in a comment.
AUTHOR: Revise your paper so that you:
1)
Analyze the number of incomplete, simple, compound, and complex
sentences; you are supposed to have 50% simple, 25% compound, 25%
complex. Combine or split sentences to keep a good balance on sentence
types.
2) Make all the incomplete sentences complete.
- CONVENTIONS: (Green)
2) Spelling____(grammer…grammar)
3) Sentence Fragments____ (Liked it! Been there. Done that.)
4) Run-on Sentences____ (I went to the store yesterday and bought eggs and ham, but they didn’t have any milk and I went home to watch T.V., so my mom got mad at me for not telling her the store was out of milk I felt bad!)
5) Capitalization____ (proper nouns, etc.)
6) Punctuation____ (commas, semicolons, quotation marks, etc.)
7) Subject Verb Agreement____ (A woman were here…The dogs is hungry)
8) Tense Agreement____ (She was here right now…They are here yesterday)
9) Singular vs. Plural____ (Two dog…One teachers)
AUTHOR: Revise your paper so that you:
1) Fix each error.
2)
Ask an adult (friend, dorm supervisor, parent, brother/sister,
aunt/uncle, grandparent, principal, teacher) to read it and mark any
errors s/he sees. S/he must sign the top of the paper after editing it.Yes we had to do all of this!!
This week we learned about sex-ting. Sex-ting can ruin your life. Just one press of the send button can change your future. Sex-ting is sending or receiving sexually explicit photos or videos through text or other digital devices. If your partner asks you to send a nude picture or video, say no. Lots of people pull the "if you love me then you will do it...." don't fall for something stupid like this. Sex-ting can most likely ruin your reputation, it always does. Before you press send, think about what you are sending.....Below is a video explaining sex- ting.
We also talked about texting and driving. Texting and driving is estimated to kill an average of 16,000 people a year. When you are driving and you get a text it can wait. When you kill someone from texting and driving, it is basically saying that the text was worth more to you than the other person who was injured or killed. There should never be a reason that you don't have your eyes on the road.
Our Definitions For The Week:
Self Disclosure: Sharing private, sensitive, or confidential information about yourself with others.
Reciprocate: To give in return.
Sex-ting: Sending or receiving sexually explicit photos or videos through text or other digital devices.
This week we learned an interesting web 2.0 resource. This web 2.0 device allows you to make your own comic strip, fun, yes I know. We used this interesting device by making our own comic strip explaining sex-ting, and how to build an online relationship. The web 2.0 device is call Make Beliefs Comix. Below is the link and my comic strips. This is a very positive web 2.0 device because it is fun to make comics out of what you want it to be. A negative aspect to this is it only gives you a choice of only 3 squares to make your comic. Also, I tried to use this for a science project, and I couldn't because the only characters it had was people. I had to do a project on the sun and the site didn't have any characters based on the sun.
Make Beliefs Comix Link
We also learned how to build relationships online with your partner. Below is a list on how to build relationships online.
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